Friday, November 14, 2014

Show, Don't Tell

From my micro story, Dating Deception.

Tell: 
Sudhir was blown away by Rita.

Show:
Sudhir was idly flipping through personal profiles on a dating website called “OK Cupid”. With one eye on the television blaring away in the background, he was hoping to find someone special to chat with, and perhaps even meet. Suddenly, he stopped.

“Oh wow!” he exclaimed. Sudhir hurried to read the blurb under the photo of a smiling woman with windswept hair.
Rita, 28, looking for fun and friendship.

He picked up the remote of the television to turn it off so he could concentrate. He started looking at the date she had uploaded this photo and tried to see her location and whether she was online. She was!


Smiling, he clicked on the Chat Now button and sat back to wait for a response.

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